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Essay Bastian Timmemermann 2005
"Pacifism is a nice idea, but won't work"
In the text they talk about pacifism and problems with it, one point is, that Joan don?t think, that it?s real, he only thinks it?s a hypothetical discussion and so he makes jokes with it and about it. And he avoids the questions of Fred and talks about funny situations which were in contact with that.
I think, that it would be very nice, if pacifism works, but our world is to violent for do it, if it could work, everybody have to it. But that is never the case, because one group always except themselves. That is bad, but it?s true. In my opinion everybody could do something for peace in his own mind. For example: Don?t beat other persons or kill them. That is one of the violence?s things you could do, I think. Another important point is, that all over the world is war. War for Oil, war for land and war for religion, war for every little thing. That is violent, because those wars could be handled peaceful, maybe with sharing the land or the oil or the whole other things. But they won?t do it so, because both enemies would have more that the other, so they had to fight for it. But that?s the wrong way. It cost lives and money and time. It?s very bad and violent.
In the text there is exact shown, how hard it is to be an pacifist each time, when his grandma was near to be killed, he must shot the killer, but he couldn?t it, because he was an pacifist, that?s a point, where pacifism not work, because only one side of two does it. If both were pacifisms, there were no problem, but the killer isn?t it.
I?m not sure, what I am. At one side I would like to be a pacifist, I think, in most cases I am one. But in some other cases, there it is hard to be one, there I wont be, one situation is the , with the grandma. There I wouldn?t be a pacifist.
kann mir evtl. jemand der ahnung von englisch hat diesen text grammatikalisch korrigieren! w?re echt super wichtig!!!
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nur mal eine sache. Also bei uns in der Schule, d?rfen wir in texten, die wir auf Englisch schreiben nicht verk?rzen. Also isn't ist bei uns nicht erlaubt, da das umgangssprachlich ist und nich formal richtig. Deswegen w?rde ich mal alle diese Formen ausschreiben, solange dies bei eurer Schule nicht anders vereinbart worden ist.
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das iss schon okay, sollen wir sagar, damit wir w?rter nicht unnn?tig hinzuf?gen k?nnen..^^ isn's =1 wort is not = 2w?rter..^^
kann den jemand mal komplett durchgucken wegen grammatik, iss total wichtig!!!
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Hmm, h?tt ich jetzt zeit, w?rde ich dir gern helfen... ich versuch mal ein bissl was:
In the text they talk about pacifism and problems with it. One point is that Joan don?t thinkes it?s real. He thinks only that it?s a hypothetical discussion and so he makes jokes with it and about it. He avoids the questions of Fred and talks about funny situations which were in contact with that.
I think that it would be very nice, if pacifism works, but our world is to violent for do it, if it could work, everybody have to do it. But that is never the case, because one group always except themselves. That is bad, but it?s true. In my opinion everybody could do something for peace in his own mind. For example: Don?t hit other persons or kill them. That is one of the violence?s things you could do, I think.
Hmm, ich hoffe mal ich hab die paar fehler drinne gefunden! Und dieses St?ckchen hilft dir schonmal weiter!
Viel spa? damit, lie? es dir bitte vorher nochmal durch!
Beachte, dass man im englischen nicht so viele Kommas schreibt!
greetz
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In the text they talk about pacifism and problems with it. One point is that Joan doesn?t think, that pacifism is real, she only thinks it?s a hypothetical discussion and makes, therefore, jokes with and about it. Moreover, she evades Fred?s question and talks of funny situations about that.
I think, it would be very nice if pacifism works, but our world is too violent for it. If it works, everybody has to live with the awareness of it. But that?ll never be the case, because groups tend to act for their own purposes. I don?t like it, but it seems that it is a fact. In my opinion everybody could do something for his own to gain peace. For example, don?t beat other persons or kill them. That is one of the most violent things one could do. Another important point is, that there is war all over the world. War because of Oil, war due to land, and war due to religion, war because of mostly ridiculous things. This is wrong, because wars could be avoided by peaceful methods, maybe by sharing land, or oil, or those rididulous things. But humans won?t do so, because every time one would like to have more than his competitor. Therefore, they have to fight for it. It cost lives, money, and time. It?s very bad and violent.
In the text there is exactly shown how hard it is to be a pacifist. When Joan?s grandma was nearly killed Joan had to shoot the killer to save her grandma?s life. Although, as a pacifist, she normally mustn?t have been doing it. That?s an example of a situation where pacifism cannot work, because only one side wants to avoid violence. If both were pacifists there wouldn?t be a problem. Sadly, the killer doesn?t want to be one.
I?m not really sure on which side I stand. Actually, I would like to be a pacifist. I think I am one, often. But sometimes it is hard to be one. An example of a situation where it is impossible to remain a pacifist is the one of Joan?s grandma. If I would have to protect the life of a close relative, or friend, I could not stand being a pacifist.
Bitte sehr! Is vielleicht nicht ganz perfekt, aber da sollte schon was bei raus springen!
Du solltest dir aber nochmal ?berlegen, was genau du eigentlich sagen willst. Also Fehler sollten keine mehr drin sein, aber vom Sinn her find ich das ziemlich unschl?ssig.
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Naja also keine Fehler ist ?bertrieben:
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Was willst du mit dem Satz sagen?:
Moreover, she evades Fred?s question and talks of funny situations about that.
Besser: Moreover, she evades Fred's question and instead of answering, starts to tell us about funny situations.
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I think, it would be very nice, if pacifism worked, but...
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For it to work, everybody has to be aware of it.
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I don't like peoples attitude towards pacifism, but probably we have to accept it.
Sry keine Zeit mehr.
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